The yellow bike

I was on my way to the shops when I realised that they was a bike out the front of an Abandoned house this was weird because the house had never had anyone or any thing in side of it before. So in stead of going to the shop I ran all the way home to my mum and dad and told them what is saw, they were shocked by this news by the point that they came with me to the house and there was nothing there. I knew something was up because before I saw a yellow bike out the front, so I went straight to the police…

3 thoughts on “The yellow bike”

  1. There are some good phrases in your story, Lily. I particularly like ‘they were shocked by this news’ and ‘I knew something was up’. They help your story to flow very well. I also like the very sensible approach you have to dealing with something strange. First you go to your parents, and then to the police.

  2. Hello Lily,

    Seeing something unusual outside an abandoned house made me wonder how you would react. I was pleased you chose the sensible path of telling your parents. Many might have written they entered the house. Well done.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  3. Hi Lily,
    What a mysterious story, I wonder what’s going on? I enjoyed reading your piece and thought that this was an interesting way to incorporate the prompt. It had an element of creepiness and horror which I liked. This is a story I would definitely love to keep reading to see where it leads!

    Keep up the good writing, Anna (Team 100WC, Edinburgh)

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